Tainted Lime Reviews Issue #16
February 10, 2002
Just a reminder on the rating system. Anything rated three stars or
better is recommended. I only give five stars to a few exceptional
stories every month. A two-star will probably appeal to a niche
audience.
Everyone has different preferencs, so reading the text of the review
will tell you far more about the than a simple one-to-five
rating sytsem.
Reviews are archived at http://www.asstr.org/~TaintedLime/.
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Stories reviewed in this issue:
Close Shave, by Tom Thumper (* * *)
ANAL ADVENTURES FOLLOWUP, by Heady (* *)
Devil's , by RocketBlast_76 (* * *)
Early Morning Breakfast, by Jeff Zephyr (* * * *)
That Perfect Place Where All The Lines Meet, by Sam Cornell (* * * * *)
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{ASSM} Close Shave {Tom Thumper} (MFF)
By Tom Thumper <tom9211@hotmail.com>
http://assm.asstr.org/Year2002/35125
Trent Gowan, a traveling salesman making a stop in a small town,
flirts with Tandy, the waitress at the town's diner. He tells her
he needs a haircut, and Tandy sends her over to see Brenda.
Brenda and Trent flirt extravagantly as Brenda shaves Trent's
head. Brenda then takes Trent into the back room reserved for her
special customers and continues shaving him, only this time, she
shaves him below the belt. As things are getting hot, the
waitress from the diner stops by, just to see how things are
going. You can probably guess what happens next.
There are embedded notes in this where illustrations should
go, so I suppose there is a website somewhere that has an
illustrated version of this on it. The has a few
technical problems, but the writing is cleaner than most ASSM
stories.
The best part of this is the over-the-top flirting. The
worst part of this is the lack of plot. It's a very good
stroke story, though, especially if shaving is one of your kinks.
Rating: * * *
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{ASSM} ANAL ADVENTURES FOLLOWUP (RE: jmcfarland 3.21.98)
By Heady <headachesville@aol.com>
http://assm.asstr.org/Year2002/35126
I'm not quite sure what this is. Based on the subject line,
it's a follow-up to some previous post. In this one, a woman puts
a double-headed dildo up the man's ass, and he puts the other end
in her ass, and then he works his dick into her pussy. Double-
fucking, as the explains.
This is the first time I've read about this particular sexual
practice, so the gets a point for originality. But there is
nothing else in this story. It's just seven short paragraphs with
very little explanation. It reads like a short section extracted
from a larger story.
Rating: * *
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{ASSM} Devil's (mf, oral, vamp, religious imagery)
By RocketBlast_76 <RocketBlast_76@yahoo.com>
http://assm.asstr.org/Year2002/35148
Stan picked up Cyla and is driving her to his place in his
Porsche Carerra. Cyla is a powerful force, way out of Stan's
league, but somehow Stan has lucked out. They get to Stan's house
and share a bottle of wine in a very erotic way. And then Cyla's
true nature comes to the forefront.
Based on the title and disclaimer, you know something ugly is
going to happen, so it's safe to assume that this is a horror
story.
My criticisms are minor, but there are several of them. There are
a couple point of view shifts that read like mistakes - the would be better if it stuck to Cyla's point of view or was more
evenly balanced between the two characters. I wasn't convinced
that a rich guy driving a Carerra would be as inexperienced with
women as the sometimes implies. The was also
abysmally spellchecked. I see a lot of grammar problems in ASSM
stories, but I rarely see so many spelling and typographic
errors.
But the is interesting, Cyla is a fascinating character,
and the author does a good job building a sense of foreboding.
The sex has a eroticism to it that fits nicely with the
story.
With a good edit job, this could be a very good story.
Rating: * * *
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{ASSM} One Fine Day -- #1 -- Early Morning Breakfast (MF oral rom cons)-by Jeff Zephyr
By Jeff Zephyr <jeffzeph@hotmail.com>
http://assm.asstr.org/Year2002/35133
This is a short interlude about a couple who wake up early one
morning so they can have a leisurely ninety minutes to make love.
It's a very nice with nice sex, although the plot is
insubstantial. The writing is very good, with only a few minor
typos and grammar mistakes.
I would put this in the category of "flash fiction." It is
very short, and it does an admirable job setting a vivid scene in
just a few words. As a piece of flash fiction, though, it could
be tightened up more. Just one example from the opening:
'No! I don't need to get up until six today!' I thought in
dismay.
The "in dismay" is redundant in this sentence. And there are a
dozen or more similar loose sentences sprinkled throughout.
But I'm a big fan of this kind of writing, and it takes a lot of
skill to do it effectively. This is a very good effort.
Rating: * * * *
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{ASSM} That Perfect Place Where All The Lines Meet (FF) by Sam Cornell
By Sam Cornell <cornell525@hotmail.com>
http://assm.asstr.org/Year2002/35134
Charlotte Whittaker - you remember her. She was the perfect in high school. She was pretty. She was popular. She didn't
stoop to the games the other high school played. She was
nice. She played Viola in the school's production of Twelfth Night.
In their all school, Charlotte Whittaker was the Sam
had the hugest crush on.
Now, twelve years later, Sam and Charlotte stumble across one
another again. They get together to talk about how their lives
turned out, and Sam gets to relive a lot of awkward times as a
teenage who got to play Sebastian - opposite Charlotte - in
the school play.
Do you remember what it was like to be a gawky teenager? Your
self-doubts, your silly infatuations? This makes those
feelings come alive. And while the explicit sex in this is
over in just a few paragraphs, the high school crush of Sam's has
a sexual charge, a charge that permeates this story.
I have a few minor nits I could pick, but that would give you the
wrong idea. I loved this story. Stop whatever you're doing and
read it now.
Rating: * * * * *
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