Tainted Lime Reviews Issue #34
April 2, 2002
Reviews are archived at http://www.asstr.org/~TaintedLime/.
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Stories reviewed in this issue:
Miranda's Desire, by Saint Phallus (* * *)
Dane the Great, by Pan ThePiper (* * *)
The Data Entry Opening, by Canyonero (* * *)
As Long as it is Art, by smiling19w (* * *)
Nine Months and Fifteen Minutes, by oldwrench (* * *)
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{ASSM} Miranda's Desire {MF oral cheating}
By Saint Phallus <saintphallus@yahoo.com>
http://assm.asstr.org/Year2002/35855
Miranda begins this suffering from insomnia as her gets thoroughly fucked by Todd in the next room. Jealousy gets
the better of Miranda, but she doesn't do anything about it. At
least not right away.
Things change the next morning when her is called in to
work, leaving Todd and the horny alone together. breaks out some killer weed, and the talk gets around to sex, and
one thing leads to another.
The writing is generally good, and the sex is nice. The word
"cock" appears far too often, but at least the author makes an
effort to make a mother-seducing-daughter's-boyfriend scenario
not seem utterly ridiculous.
As a stroke story, this isn't too bad.
Rating: * * *
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{ASSM} Dane the Great {Pan} (mf, m-first)
By Pan ThePiper <pan_thepiper@hotmail.com>
http://assm.asstr.org/Year2002/35867
Dane is a freshman at a Catholic school. On the first day of gym,
he notices all the other in the locker room staring at him.
That is when he realizes that he is hung far greater than most
males.
It also earns him new respect around the school. Dane is soon
hanging around with an crowd, and at a weekend party, he
meets Stacy. Dane and Stacy retire to a quiet room, and Stacy
discovers the most amazing cock she will ever see.
This is a dumb in a lot of ways, but it is mixed up with
some good stuff, too. I like the way Dane likes to fit in with
the rest of the students, and I like that he remains faithful to
his friends despite his new popularity. Unfortunately, the
social aspects of Dane's situation are downplayed so much that
they become tangential, but they still added a special spice to
an otherwise ordinary fantasy.
Rating: * * *
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{ASSM} The Data Entry Opening (MF)
By Canyonero <prefectbert@excite.com>
http://assm.asstr.org/Year2002/35872
Horny 42-year-old bosses have a secret fantasy to fuck some who comes in looking for a job. At least that is the world
according to "The Data Entry Opening." Male fantasy babe Hannah
comes in looking for a job, and John can't help but to hire the
inexperienced girl.
Hannah and John get to know one another slowly over most of the
rest of the story, sharing late dinners and talking about their
lives. During the company Christmas party, Hannah and John
finally do something about their growing interest in one another.
I give the author credit for working hard to base the
relationship on something more than faceless physical attraction.
But the mixes in a few very unrealistic scenes (a car
vandalism thing, in particular) that destroy the mood. The
writing is good in parts, not so good in others.
The sex, when it finally comes, is pretty good. The ending, when
it comes, is dissatisfying. But at least the long setup gives us
a basis to care a little about the characters, and that is worth
something.
Rating: * * *
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{ASSM} "As Long as it is Art" (Ff True)
By smiling19w <smiling19w@netscape.net>
http://assm.asstr.org/Year2002/35876
A 17-year-old girl's will do anything for art, which, for
her, means painting. She wants her to be a renowned
artist, and when art classes at high school aren't getting her
there fast enough, she arranges for lessons with a tutor.
Cynthia takes the narrator under her wing, and they are
soon sketching and painting three times a week. Fortunately, the
girl doesn't have a problem with nudity - her has made it
clear that nudity for the cause of art is nothing to be ashamed
of - so the teacher and the student spend a lot of time posing
nude for one another.
As you've already guessed, Cynthia and the are soon fucking
like crazy.
Once the relationship between teacher and pupil gets rolling, the
scenes become fast and sketchy, which is a shame, since much of
the sex happens late in the story. The is at its best in the
first couple sex scenes and in describing the growing infatuation
of the pupil with her teacher.
Unfortunately, the writing is also spotty. There are quite a few
typos and missing words, the dialogue is not natural, and a
couple times the labored with sentences that repeated the
same point.
But there is still a lot to like here. A good plot, a good
ending, a nice supporting character in the - it all adds
up to a decent story.
Rating: * * *
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{ASSM} ASSM Nine Months and Fifteen Minutes (MF 1st preg)
By oldwrench <oldwrench2000@yahoo.com>
http://assm.asstr.org/Year2002/35877
The begins with the birth of a man's nephew. Immediately,
we flash back to nine months earlier, on the man's sister's
wedding day.
The narrator is the driver for the new couple as they make their
way to the reception. All the pent-up lust is too much for the
newlyweds, and they are soon consummating their relationship in
the back of the car while the bride's drives along.
The oddly flaunts a point of view problem. The narrator is
a character of the story, but knows too much about what the other
participants are doing and feeling. How could a driver know what
the bride is feeling as her new husband's cock slowly enters her
pussy? But don't be put off it - there is a reason for
everything!
The writing has troubles in places, which is odd, because most of
it is well-crafted. The could use one more proofreading
pass.
This is the second oldwrech I've reviewed, and he is an
author to look out for. Had this been as polished as the
first I reviewed, it would receive a very high score. And
even without the polish, it's still a pretty picture.
Rating: * * *
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